I'll read it. Go ahead and PM me.
Tell me what you would like me to do.
On first drafts I usually just write about overall impression, themes, etc. Too me, the first draft is too rough to do hardcore critiques. But ifyouw ould like me to be more detailed and critique line by line/paragraph by paragraph please tell me.
I can be pretty mean sometimes, but know that I do it simply to help and not to be, well a *****. I personally like really good constructive criticism, but I realize not everyone else does.