OK, I guess it's time to stop putting off writing my PS and get down to business. I've come up with a very rough draft, and just wanted to know what others would think of it (so I wouldn't have to write this damn thing again).. Any comment would be greatly appreciated. It goes like this:
1) After I got my acceptance letter to undergrad, I got quite fat cause I relaxed a bit too much. (I think I gained about 20 pounds in 3 months or so) I bought a treadmill and started jogging, and got back in shape.
2) I was born to a middle-class family and enjoyed a comfortable life until age 15. Then my dad's business went bankrupt (due to the Asian crisis in 1997) and we immigrated to Canada. After that, I faced many obstacles immigrants typically encounter - language barrier, cultural differences, etc. - on top of a financial problem. Basically, it was an experience of downfall from the mainstream to a monority.
3) I'll somehow tie my experience in 2) to the weight problem in 1), comparing the challenges I faced to the countless hours of running I had to do. I'll further compare my achievements in life to my successful weight loss, and assert that the challenges I faced actually enabled me to become who I am today. I kinda hope that adcoms will see me as a guy with a positive spirit who can overcome obstacles..
what do you guys/gals think of this topic? Please be honest as I can handle criticism. heck, I'm even willing to scrap it if nobody likes it..

thanx in advance..