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A combination of alcohol abuse and immaturity has left my earlier transcripts horrible. After suffering a traumatic brain injury (TBI) in the summer of 1997, I refused to be treated for the resultant depression. While my course work in high school did not falter, I was not prepared for the rigors of undergraduate collegiate studies. I should not have been in college at the time, but my immaturity kept me from getting the help that I needed. My performance at Minnesota State University-Moorhead was extremely poor, but I refused to seek treatment even after academic probations following the Spring 2000 and Spring 2001 terms. My last term at MSUM – Spring 2003 – also resulted in another academic probation.
Under the advice of my father, I enrolled in a diploma program for electrical powerline. I had still not received treatment for depression or alcoholism, and as a result I performed poorly but nevertheless passed all the coursework. After working in the industry for ten months, I realized that I could not pursue a career in the electrical industry and I became even more depressed. I was subsequently arrested for a driving under the influence (my third such offense), and it was this mistake that was the catalyst for a change in my life.
Under court orders, I received treatment for alcoholism. The program I was enrolled in consisted of three-hour classes, four nights a week, for five months. I also made the decision to see a psychiatrist. Not surprisingly, I was diagnosed with depression, most likely the result of the TBI I suffered. I was prescribed medicine, enrolled at Ridgewater College in Willmar, and did well. After completing my Associates of Arts, I transferred to St. Cloud State University where I have accumulated a 3.72 GPA and received a scholarship for overcoming difficulties in life. My academic record prior to the Summer 2007 semester is shameful, but it also a clear demarcation between when I had not received treatment and when I had completed the classes.