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Potenial diveristy statement, Feedback is needed..thnks!

Potenial diveristy statement, Feedback is needed..thnks!
« on: October 11, 2009, 02:29:55 PM »
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Re: Potenial diveristy statement, Feedback is needed..thnks!
« Reply #1 on: October 11, 2009, 03:50:35 PM »
I'm not sure whether the last paragraph would be suitable

"Today, I carry on the Native American culture and values my family embraced. As an attorney, I desire..."

Also, might there be other native people that DO wear bonnets/have arrows? Just because the symbol did not represent you, maybe it represents others. You seem to say that the symbol is unrepresentative of any group.

I think the story is good, but I'm not sure if it is diverse enough... (I'm stuck at my div. statement too)

Re: Potenial diveristy statement, Feedback is needed..thnks!
« Reply #2 on: October 11, 2009, 05:08:56 PM »
I'm not sure whether the last paragraph would be suitable

"Today, I carry on the Native American culture and values my family embraced. As an attorney, I desire..."

Also, might there be other native people that DO wear bonnets/have arrows? Just because the symbol did not represent you, maybe it represents others. You seem to say that the symbol is unrepresentative of any group.

I think the story is good, but I'm not sure if it is diverse enough... (I'm stuck at my div. statement too)

Thanks for your feedback!

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Re: Potenial diveristy statement, Feedback is needed..thnks!
« Reply #3 on: October 17, 2009, 09:37:43 AM »
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