Please critique my first draft

jas142 · « **on:** September 06, 2008, 10:19:17 PM »

Just completed the first draft of my PS. I need honest criticism. I will trade if you like

blueskies6 · « **Reply #1 on:** September 07, 2008, 08:46:53 AM »

I'd be happy to trade

randyers09 · « **Reply #2 on:** September 07, 2008, 11:24:24 AM »

ill critique it for you

jas142 · « **Reply #3 on:** September 08, 2008, 05:38:09 PM »

Thanks for the reviews guys. I have updated it and the second draft is complete (and substantially different than the first, hah). Any takers?

blueskies6 · « **Reply #4 on:** September 08, 2008, 06:18:29 PM »

Sure- I think I've worked on mine too since you last saw it so we can trade

sooz104 · « **Reply #5 on:** September 09, 2008, 12:24:59 AM »

I'd like to take a look toO! =]

studymaster · « **Reply #6 on:** September 09, 2008, 11:31:25 PM »

If youre still interested PM me and I will trade ya