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Follow up email for a rare treat.
« on: February 10, 2005, 08:54:20 AM »
I have a friend that's a 1L at GULC and I am going to watch his oral arguments tonight.

I'm on the PWL and I'm going to send an email tomorrow to them to thank them and express my interest.

could any of you read this and let me know how it sounds.  I think in it's current composition it's a little thick with "yay Georgetown"

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Dear Admissions,

Yesterday I had the privelege of attending Oral Arguments for the current 1L students' Legal Research and Writing course.  This thouroughly engaging experience has cemented my decision to consider Georgetown University Law Center as my top choice for matriculation next fall.  I currently reside, hopefully temporarily, on the preferred waitlist.  Being able to view the education process at Georgetown up close has made me extremely excited about the possibility of my attendance.

Once again I would like to thank GULC for my attendance and also thank Professor [name] as well as the students for allowing my to observe.

Sincerely,

LaneSwerver

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« Reply #1 on: February 10, 2005, 08:59:10 AM »
Instead of "up close" I would say "in person."

Otherwise, looks great!

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« Reply #2 on: February 10, 2005, 09:01:14 AM »
Instead of "up close" I would say "in person."

Otherwise, looks great!

thanks, good input

Dr. No

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« Reply #3 on: February 10, 2005, 09:05:08 AM »

instead of 'of my attendance', maybe 'of attending law school'.

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Re: Follow up email for a rare treat.
« Reply #4 on: February 10, 2005, 09:06:00 AM »

instead of 'of my attendance', maybe 'of attending law school'.

oh yeah, that's passive huh.

EDIT:
and then I'm gonna cut "the possibility of"

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« Reply #5 on: February 10, 2005, 09:11:09 AM »
What do you mean by "I would like to thank GULC for my attendance"? 

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« Reply #6 on: February 10, 2005, 09:13:45 AM »
What do you mean by "I would like to thank GULC for my attendance"? 

oooh, poor choice in words... I mean the Oral Argument attendance.

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« Reply #7 on: February 10, 2005, 09:16:40 AM »
What do you mean by "I would like to thank GULC for my attendance"? 

oooh, poor choice in words... I mean the Oral Argument attendance.

Maybe thank them for the opportunity to attend the oral argument?

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« Reply #8 on: February 10, 2005, 09:20:51 AM »
What do you mean by "I would like to thank GULC for my attendance"? 

oooh, poor choice in words... I mean the Oral Argument attendance.

Maybe thank them for the opportunity to attend the oral argument?

done!
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Re: Follow up email for a rare treat.
« Reply #9 on: February 10, 2005, 09:28:40 AM »
I've never writter or seen a letter like this one, so take my $0.02 with some caution.

I think the letter is a good shell, but it's a bit form-letterish.  I imagine you'll revise it after going to the oral arguments.  If you do, I'd suggest adding more detail about why seeing the arguments really turned you onto Georgetown.  As is, I didn't find the letter too heavy on G-town love.  In fact, I didn't think there was enough specific information about why the school suddenly became your number one choice.  (This is what I interpret as the intention of the letter.)  I figure the admission committee doesn't want to be inundated with a series of letters like this, so this could very well be your one of a limited number of chances to express your desire to be admitted there.  Give 'em tons of love, so long as it seems sincere and personal.

Have fun, and bon chance!