Thanks again for the help mwitterone and Jawhawkgirl
I have cleaned up the grammar, let me know if you see anything glaring
Also I included a bit more about details about my recovery. Let me know if you think I should do more
Here it is:
I am a thirty-two (32) year old who returned to college after making some poor decisions in my life. I submit my application after 115 consecutive hours of As in five semesters at the University of Texas in Austin. I believe this commitment to academic excellence, coupled with the fact that I have been drug and alcohol free for over two years, is a strong indicator of the changes in my character.
In June, 2002, I was involved in a car accident while intoxicated. Two individuals were injured; but by the grace of God, they fully recovered within a short time. There is not a day that goes by that I do not regret this mistake.
In any event, I accepted responsibility for my actions and pled guilty to a felony intoxication assault in Columbus, Colorado County, Texas. I likewise accepted my punishment of thirty (30) days confinement in jail, a $5,000.00 fine and ten (10) years probation. My probation has proceeded without incident, and I should be released by 2007.
Prior to that time, I received a deferred adjudication termed dangerous drugs in Houston, Harris County, Texas in 1993. My friend had a marijuana plant growing in his attic, and while I did not reside there, I was present at the time of search and seizure. I received and served three (3) months probation for the offense.
While in college for the first time in 1992, I paid a $70.00 citation for public intoxication. This was in Austin, Travis County, Texas.
While I know there are many applicants with spotless criminal records, I ask for a chance. What good is the goal of rehabilitation in criminal law, if even law schools themselves will not give a person with a record an opportunity? If you give me the chance, I will prove that the most admirable goal of the criminal justice system can work in certain cases.
Arc, your grades "As" do not stand out the first time I read it. A's doesn't look good either, just leeting you know. Your transition "In any event" conveys a lack of seriousness. Very awkward.
The last paragraph has to go. Don't ASK for anything even if you deserve it. Don't compare yourself to the others; you are non trad. Stay with that theme. I don't mean to sound harsh, but you know me by now.