Personal Statements, Resumes, and Letters of Recommendation / Re: Is my PS just lame? Looking for feedback...« on: January 09, 2006, 12:54:15 AM »
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I am almost done with my cultural diversity and overcome essay, but I am having trouble with a transition between 2 abstract subjects. If your brain can draw connections between odd things could I use it to help me. Just need 1-2 good sentences
won't take long. Thanks so much. ANybody?
You know how you get so many E-mails from schools saying why they are the best choice for you and why you should apply. How much of any of them can you recall? Writing about why a school should accept you comes off the same but in reverse. If the school has a good reputation and so on, it doesn't matter, you might apply anyway, if you get a generic E-mail from a school you have never heard of, you will only be interested if they say something about the dinosaurs that roam the law school library.
Point being; to get any advantage out of your PS, you can't be generic. Write something that makes the reader think you are a better candidate than what your application otherwise shows. The number one rule that has been touched on but not explicitly stated in this thread is your PS must be positive. If you write a well-crafted essay about absolutely horrible things that have happened to you, what does that accomplish, does the reader have any better idea of your positive attributes? I think you almost have to write your PS like a used car advertisement, just with English above the 1st grade level.
Thank you for your input. I did not intend to write an essay about how I beat alcoholism. I drink quite a lot actually (hahah). My father quit drinking shortly before I was born. He came from nothing. For my entire life we climbed the social ladder and have achieved a solidly upper middle class life. I was the first male in my family to go to college. I'll be the first to go to law school. I feel compelled to write about this topic because I feel that it is something that I care about. I understand that it is a risky topic though, mainly because it doesnít address why I want to study law.
My reasons for going to law school are really very practical. Iíve been working for four years now and have found out that English Majors have very little to leverage in the work force. I think I would enjoy legal research and writing. The skills that I have (reading, writing, analytical thinking) are valuable skills in the field of law. I think law is the most suitable way for me to make the kind of living that I want to make.
I donít think Iím capable of writing a genuine intellectual piece about why I love the law. What did you write about? Anyone?
Just wanted to jump in here and give praise for Burhops. She really helped me with my PS. She has some great suggestions and helped with editing and I am still amazed at the effort I received from a (initially) complete stranger. I know myself, my PS resembled at least one of these scenarios, but she really helped me turn it around.
By the way, I can understand why people lash out when their essays are criticized. You've spent 7 long and painful hours in the delivery room giving birth to your beautiful baby and when some one tells you it's absolutely hideous you'd probably get a bit cranky.
Yeah, I understand that. But, hopefully, when people ask for feedback they are expecting honesty. Presumably they've spent 7 hours in the delivery room in order to have a healthy child. If the baby is sick and needs surgery, it's a bit counter-productive to yell at the obstetritian who tells you so. Ok - I think I might have stretched that metaphor a bit far....
I hope the adcomms feel the way that you do about my PS
Along this same line, I've heard that running through all life accomplishments is a no-no; that just reads like an extended resume.
Aaah, the extended resume - that should have been number 2 on the list. The Admissions Director mentioned this one as being a definite way to make the statement IMpersonal. This is a great thread Dani!