« on: January 09, 2006, 02:54:15 AM »
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« on: January 09, 2006, 02:53:02 AM »
I am almost done with my cultural diversity and overcome essay, but I am having trouble with a transition between 2 abstract subjects. If your brain can draw connections between odd things could I use it to help me. Just need 1-2 good sentences
Do you need a transition? Would it work to just put *** and jump into another subject? Not that this would be typical, but it could probably be done.
If that seems too risque, the best way to create a transition between two disparate subjects is to set the reader up for it from the get-go. In your introduction, you say something like: "There are two experiences that really exemplify..." Then in the following paragraphs, you say: "The first is..." "Finally, the second is..." as you introduce each topic. Simple, but it's easy for adcomms to follow the breadcrumbs that way.
...if this is completely out in left field, PM me and I'll take a look!
You know how you get so many E-mails from schools saying why they are the best choice for you and why you should apply. How much of any of them can you recall? Writing about why a school should accept you comes off the same but in reverse. If the school has a good reputation and so on, it doesn't matter, you might apply anyway, if you get a generic E-mail from a school you have never heard of, you will only be interested if they say something about the dinosaurs that roam the law school library.
The spin I usually give it is "your PS is like a good love letter--you gotta make the school *want* your ass."
heehee! SCOTUS fukyu:
O Harriet Miers
You are my hero, lady--
eyeliner and all
Scalia, my man
can I be your Liberal?
No, you say? Fukyu!
Ginsburg always pouts--
laugh meter? You lose! Times has
no sense of humor.
retire? Yes no yes no
yes no yes no yes
as hot as newbie John and
his perfect bald spot
ha! Y'all are hilarious--there are some really good ones in here. I'm going to let the thread run a bit longer so as to collect more brilliance for you folks, and then I'm going to compile them all and fashion a 'vote thread' in some manner that will likely lead to chaos.
I'm thinking the final list will have 10-15 topics, which will be juxtaposed nicely to create the sort of laugh-tension that results from being hit by two sorts of funny at once. (This, I find, usually culminates in a hearty snort/guffaw).
That abortion one was soooo wrong it was right, btw.
34. How I will help Miersed become the new Borked
35. How I blogged as 'Harriet Miers' (http://harrietmiers.blogspot.com/)
36. Harriet Miers is my hero!
Thank you for your input. I did not intend to write an essay about how I beat alcoholism. I drink quite a lot actually (hahah). My father quit drinking shortly before I was born. He came from nothing. For my entire life we climbed the social ladder and have achieved a solidly upper middle class life. I was the first male in my family to go to college. I'll be the first to go to law school. I feel compelled to write about this topic because I feel that it is something that I care about. I understand that it is a risky topic though, mainly because it doesnít address why I want to study law.
It is a risky topic--not because it doesn't address law specifically, but because this is a common response to the idea of "personal statement"--writing about the most personal thing that has happened to oneself. The PS's that result from this instinct (often) end up reading like therapy transcripts.
The best PS's I've seen this season have been very action-oriented, along the lines of "here's one very colorful and memorable thing I accomplished that makes me seem like a hard-working, thoughtful, genuine candidate who would be great to have around for three years." The essays contain lots of action verbs, and all of the paragraphs focus around some central accomplishment. This creates a very holistic, memorable storyline that will stick in the adcomms heads.
...not to say that the 'first to college/law school' thing isn't important--but what if you were to set up the essay with the first 3-4 paragraphs around a story that makes you seem brilliant/fun/accomplished, and *then* mention right at the end "hey, I'm a first for my family." That, I would argue, would make the introduction of that info endearing--mentioning it up front is more...imploring, you know?
in any case, I hope you find the story you'd like to tell. And of course, there's loads of us on here willing to send you more advice than you'll ever possibly need, should you ask! ;-)
Just wanted to jump in here and give praise for Burhops. She really helped me with my PS. She has some great suggestions and helped with editing and I am still amazed at the effort I received from a (initially) complete stranger. I know myself, my PS resembled at least one of these scenarios, but she really helped me turn it around.
Whoa!!! *major blush*
By the way, I can understand why people lash out when their essays are criticized. You've spent 7 long and painful hours in the delivery room giving birth to your beautiful baby and when some one tells you it's absolutely hideous you'd probably get a bit cranky.
redemption, gadfly--your PS worries are non-existent! I've seen both, and you both come across as engaged and engaging.
I, of course, probably came across like a whack-job in everything I wrote. I shoulda just sent the Puma 250 in the stead of.....everything. O, alas, 20/20 hindsight!
Now, if I could only get into law school based on LSD threads...should I send an addendum to this effect, you think? ;-)