The fact is your dad complained, partners in law firms hate complainers. More writing advice "about about" will not get you on any journal. Also starting a sentence with "And" is a sign of bad writing skills. You obviously go to a t4 or non aba law school, and should give up trying to write onto a journal, you lack basic writing skills. Also working in a law firm before law school is viewed by most partners as a NEGATIVE. If you do not believe me read anonymous lawyers blog. Paralegals carry a bad stigma with them for there entire career.
To top it off, this idiot is criticizing people's writing. Starting a sentence with "and" means you must go to a t4? Well, you must go to one to; last time I checked the correct word was "their," not "there."