Basic, but not contractions. I think comparing yourself to the president is a bit much unless you expand on it more. What is the point of bringing it up? It doesn't flow and it sounds a bit arrogant on its own..My $0.02:
(Not trying to be a d1ck, just trying to save you from catastrophic failure)
^^ This guy hit the nail on the head. After reading that first paragraph, I couldn't quite take the rest of your statement seriously. It has no bearing on your aptitude or enthusiasm for the practice of law, nor does it explain why you would like to go to XXX law school - take it out.
"My clients" - LOL, what?! You mean to tell me that you have directly
solicited and are receiving business from these large corporations?
"I know I must kiss my students on the cheek" - Irrelevant. I know you're trying to put a diversity spin on your personal statement, but this is just ridiculous.
"This also led me to pursue Spanish and International Marketing during my summer abroad in Barcelona, Spain." - Your work experience communicating work orders to the Hispanic crew and them telling you about their culture led you to pursue this coursework? Incredulous. Make your personal statement as real as possible.
"many Americans are told that the world hates America because the world thinks it tries too hard to police everyone else" - Off putting for Americans to read (presumably the entire admissions committee), even if you say that the foregoing statement isn't necessarily the truth. Steer clear of controversy in your personal statement.
"the campus is ideally located in XXXXX, near many of the states’ top law firms." -- THIS IS NOT WHAT YOU SHOULD LEAD OFF WITH FOR YOUR REASONS TO CHOOSE XXXXX LAW SCHOOL! You just talked about diversity and gave a sap story about your father's death... now you're going to tell the law school that the first and foremost reason you chose their school is for the cash?! Also, if this is a must have statement for you, you better be damn sure that the school doesn't pride itself in being a major supplier to the public interest market.