Personal Statements, Resumes, and Letters of Recommendation / Re: Potenial diveristy statement, Feedback is needed..thnks!« on: October 11, 2009, 05:08:56 PM »
I'm not sure whether the last paragraph would be suitable
"Today, I carry on the Native American culture and values my family embraced. As an attorney, I desire..."
Also, might there be other native people that DO wear bonnets/have arrows? Just because the symbol did not represent you, maybe it represents others. You seem to say that the symbol is unrepresentative of any group.
I think the story is good, but I'm not sure if it is diverse enough... (I'm stuck at my div. statement too)
Thanks for your feedback!