« on: December 17, 2005, 05:40:45 PM »
Ok I started! Took me a long time but I finally have an intro paragraph and a little more. Take a look:
As I stared into the mirror at the mark on my face I began to cry. It was the day before school pictures in my kindergarten class, and I had a huge bite mark on my check. The bite did not come from any house pet though; it came from my brother. My wonderful, loving, and completely innocent brother. Five minutes after thinking this I stopped crying. It was all right because Lance hadn’t meant to hurt me.
My most important life experience has been, and still is, my relationship with my brother Lance. Lance has autism, mild retardation, and developmental delay. This is an on-going learning experience for my whole family. From a very early age I was needed to help my parents with taking care of Lance. We didn’t know that he was different until he was two years old. In 1987 not much was known about autism or what causes it, and although there has been progress in understanding the condition, the mystery is yet to be solved today.
Having a brother with autism has absolutely shaped my life. Lance is only two years younger than I, yet I watched over him on a daily basis, shared a room with him for years, and tried my best to teach him to say things like, “I love you” and “I want a cookie.” Although my life growing up was heavily impacted by Lance’s disability, it was by no means soured. Lance has brought an immense amount of joy to my life. Where else can you see in somebody no longer a child, the innocence and earnestness which defines the uncorrupted human spirit?
this is just to introduce the topic i guess, then will go into more detail and relate to desire to study law, but let me know if it's good enough to start with. (I am esp. interested to know how the first paragrph sounds since it's the first thing adcoms will see.) Thanks everyone!