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Messages - jchb6d

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I'm just another lowly law school applicant.  Not a "professional Ivy-educated essay editor" by any means.

But I think you could do with more imagery at the very beginning.

Describe the setting more.  Was it hot?  Was it crowded?  Is there a smell you remember?  Is there memorable color to the classroom?

With your "It's 9:30PM in a small classroom..." I see that you're trying to put the reader in your place, but I don't know that describing a time is the most effective way to do that.

Sorry to only have a negative.  Not much else to go on.

From the other paragraph summaries, it looks like this could really go places.

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Same thing here.

Message me with your email.  I'll send mine and review yours.

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Same thing here.

Message me with your email.  I'll send mine and review yours.

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