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« on: February 03, 2005, 11:03:59 PM »
I got my acceptance letter from the University of Nebraska today!!! I'm so excited, I'm shaking right now! My husband just got a job with a police department there, so me getting into law school perfectly completes our plans to start our "grown-up" lives. An added bonus is that we can finally buy a house, which we could never do if we stayed in Minnesota (too expensive)! I am so happy right now!
« on: December 07, 2004, 10:59:50 PM »
This is an explanation of the economic and educational disadvantages I had to overcome to get my undergrad degree. This is a required essay for the University of Nebraska. Any help (grammar, content suggestions etc.) would be great.
I was raised in a strict religous church where the woman’s role was defined by motherhood and vocational homemaking. College education was not encouraged for women because the church leaders thought that the ideas espoused at most universities undermined a woman’s submission to male authority. Because my parents agreed with these beliefs, they were not supportive of me going to college, and once I started attending the University of Minnesota they did nothing to lessen the responsibilities I had at home.
I am the eldest of ten children, and my parents relied heavily on me to help raise my siblings. My dad had to work very long hours to support our large family, and he was rarely home. Since my mom did not have a driver’s license, it was my duty to do all the shopping for the family and run all the errands. That was on top of the cooking, cleaning and other chores I did at home, while working part-time and attending the University of Minnesota.
Like all the other families in our church, my parents home-schooled my siblings and I. Unfortunately, because my mom and dad were so busy with all my younger siblings, I ended up teaching myself starting in the fifth grade. This was a handicap for me once I went to college because I was not accustomed to the rigor of academic life at a formal institution; before college I had never had an assignment deadline, been required to write an essay, or worked on a group project. I had also never had access to a computer before, and I did not even know how to use e-mail.
After I moved out of my parents’ home to continue my education, it became necessary for me to work nearly full-time to support myself. My parents were against me continuing to attend college so they refused to fill out and sign my FAFSA, and thus I was not eligable for financial aid. My first year on my own, according to my tax return I made $8,702.22. I paid $3,602.70 in tuition, books and school supplies that year. What was left after the cost of my education just barely covered my living expenses. This continued to be my financial situation until 2002.
These are the educational and economic challenges that I overcame to obtain my undergraduate degree. It was not easy, but I value the lessons I learned. I especially value that I have been able to be a role model and trailblazer for my younger siblings. I hope that with my help, their path will be easier than mine was.
« on: November 24, 2004, 07:22:21 PM »
« on: November 22, 2004, 09:46:20 PM »
I hope these make you laugh. The last four are my favorites.
You would be amazed at the things that get written in admissions essays-even at the top schools. The following is a list of some of the funniest mistakes found by the admissions officers on our team. Remember that behind the hilarity of these errors lurks a serious message: always proofread your essays! Otherwise, you will get the same reaction that these other applicants did: “It makes you wonder if these kids care about their essays at all,” said one of our staff. “I never know whether to call it apathy or ignorance,” said another “but either way, the impression is not good.” Then again, at least they got a laugh!
· Mt. Elgon National Park is well known for its rich deposits of herds of elephants.
· I enjoyed my bondage with the family and especially with their mule, Jake.
· The book was very entertaining, even though it was about a dull subject, World War II.
· I would love to attend a college where the foundation was built upon women.
· The worst experience that I have probably ever had to go through emotionally was when other members of PETA (People for the Ethical Treatment of Animals) and I went to Pennsylvania for their annual pigeon shooting.
· He was a modest man with an unbelievable ego.
· Scuba One members are volunteers, but that never stops them from trying to save someone’s life.
· Hemingway includes no modern terminology in A Farewell to Arms. This, of course, is due to that fact that it was not written recently.
· I am proud to be able to say that I have sustained from the use of drugs, alcohol and tobacco products.
· I’ve been a strong advocate of the abomination of drunk driving.
· If Homer’s primary view of mortal life could be expressed in a word it would be this: life is fleeting.
· Such things as divorces, separations, and annulments greatly reduce the need for adultery to be committed.
· It is rewarding to hear when some of these prisoners I have fought for are released, yet triumphant when others are executed.
· Playing the saxophone lets me develop technique and skill which will help me in the future, since I would like to become a doctor.
· However, many students would not be able to emerge from the same situation unscrewed.
· I look at each stage as a challenge, and an adventure, and as another experience on my step ladder of life.
· “Bare your cross,” something I have heard all my life.
· There was one man in particular who caught my attention. He was a tiny man with ridiculously features all of which, with the exception of his nose, seemed to drown in the mass of the delicate transparent pinkish flesh that cascaded from his forehead and flowed over the collar of his tuxedo and the edge of his bow tie.
· Take Wordsworth, for example; every one of his words is worth a hundred words.
· For almost all involved in these stories, premature burial has had a negative effect on their lives.
· I know that as we age, we tend to forget the bricklayers of our lives.
· I would like to see my own ignorance wither into enlightenment.
· Another activity I take personally is my church Youth Group.
· The outdoors is two dimensional, challenging my physical and mental capabilities.
· Going to school in your wonderfully gothic setting would be an exciting challenge.
· My mother worked hard to provide me with whatever I needed in my life, a good home, a fairly stale family and a wonderful education.
· I hope to provide in turn, a self motivated, confident, and capable individual to add to the reputation of Vasser University whose name stands up for itself. [Note: the correct spelling is Vassar].
· Filled with Victorian furniture and beautiful antique fixtures, even at that age I was amazed.
· They eagerly and happily took our bags, welcomed us in English, and quickly drove us out of the airport.
· Do I shake the hand that has always bitten me?
· In the spring, people were literally exploding outside.
· Freedom of speech is the ointment which sets us free.
· I first was exposed through a friend who attends [school].
· As an extra, we even saw Elizabeth Taylor’s home, which had a bridge attaching it to the hoe across the street.
· Under Activities: Volunteer (Retarded totor)
· Name of Activity: Cook and serve homeless
· On a transcript: AP Engllish
· Misspelled abbreviation on another transcript: COMP CRAP (computer graphics)
· Handwritten on an interview form under Academic Interests: Writting.
« on: November 22, 2004, 08:28:42 PM »
Is it a bad idea to transmit my apps to schools a day or two before thanksgiving?
« on: November 16, 2004, 06:02:38 PM »
I have a bunch of questions on some of the editing the essay queen did. I also have questions on things she didn't change. I know there's a lot here, so thanks for taking the time to help me out.
1. In my first year of college, I learned how to speak Spanish, went to a Jewish synagogue service and attended several poetry readings.
2. These experiences, along with many others, greatly expanded my world-view.
3. My mother did not have a driver's license, so it was my responsibility to get my siblings to music lessons, the doctor, the dentist and other appointments.
4. At school I was only hanging on by a thread, because there was no time to work on assignments until one or two in the morning.
5. There were days when I spent three hours in the car, and then went home to help teach my siblings, make dinner, do laundry, bathe my siblings, and puthem to bed.
Are these commas right? I just feel like there are so many.
6. Should this sentence be this: I had two choices: I could be part of a tight family, and lose the freedom to pursue my future, or I could be a liberated individual, on my own.
I had two choices. I could be part of a tight family and lose the freedom to pursue my future, or I could be a liberated individual on my own.
6. Now, I only need to look at my younger sister to know what my life would have been if I had not left. She is married, has a baby and is a stay at home mom. She is twenty-years-old. One person who read this part of ps thought it might be offensive. I am just trying to emphasize that if I hadn't left home my future was already decided.
7. I originally ended my personal statement with "I have given myself more than the life that was offered to me". Would it be better to change it to "I am giving myself more than the life that was offered to me" since this statement show that I'm still in the process.
BTW, I orginally had "My mom was pregnant again (number nine), I was the oldest child and they expected me to help". The essay queen changed it to "My mom was pregnant again (number nine), and because I was the oldest child and they expected me to help"...hmmm.
Anyway, thank you so much for your help! Since my last lor was finally sent, I'm hoping to finish up everything this week.
« on: November 16, 2004, 05:03:03 PM »
The University of Nebraska asks as part of it's app if I've had to overcome significant educational or economic disadvantages to obtain my undergrad degree. You are then required to explain on a separate sheet of paper.
What is considered significant?
Also, since my personal statement is about the kind of family life I grew up in and how that affected my ability to get my degree, can my explanation be very short? Like one paragraph?
Would the following work?
Although I have written about the barriers to my undergraduate degree in my personal statement, I would like to offer a short explanation here also. And then quickly discuss my disadvantages.
If I write about these issues in both my ps and the explanation U of NE wants should I not mention them in my GPA addendum? I don't want to be redundant. I'm just confused on what to do?
« on: November 11, 2004, 03:00:15 AM »
Waiting tables paid the bills during school but it doesn't do much for the resume. It doesn't help that I had trouble finding a "real" job after I graduated (I didn't want any of the jobs my degree qualified me for) and contiued waitresing for the next 1 1/2 years. Does anyone else have a resume of only entry-level jobs?
« on: November 11, 2004, 02:19:31 AM »
I was wondering if those of you who had to send a resume including number of hours worked, why you left and whether the work was during academic periods could provide me with a copy of your resume? I'm finding it difficult to write my resume without it looking too cluttered.
Also, maybe those of you who are great at writing resumes would be willing to read mine when I'm email@example.com
« on: November 10, 2004, 11:00:54 PM »
When I list my research on my reseume do I name the person I worked under? Should I name all the techniques and equipment I used? I'm not sure how to state this information.
Directed Research under Professor Lincoln Potter. Participated with team of graduate and undergraduate students in research interested in signal transduction, natriuretic peptides, guanylyl cyclase receptors and cGMP. Designed and performed experiments to study the effects of reduced NaCl on the regulation of the natriuretic peptide signaling pathway. This research may be used for treatment of diseases such as hypertension, atherosclerosis and dwarfism.
Performed forty-step hormone binding assays. Graphed and interpreted results. Prepared buffers, grew cell cultures and handled radioactivity.